Endnotes for students

Response to Pot Legal

I like that you have a specific paragraph for each problems such as drug lords, problems, and politicians. You bring in good examples like Jim Gray but look up proper citations so you can make your essay more reliable. And for one last thing, I recommend that you review possessive form and plural vs. singular. I noticed that those problems repeat through the essay.

This student has a pretty good idea regarding overall essay structure and paragraph content. I think the paragraphs are mostly focused with relevant information but could use some expanding. I am hoping that the student will be able to understand what I am trying to suggest when I mentioned possessive and plural forms. There are other topics that the students needs work on but I feel like it would overwhelm him or her if I brought up everything. I figured this would be a good place to start.

Response to Weird Friday

You have very good descriptions and little details like the way your mom calls you mijo. I definitely know what you mean when the alarm clock goes off like that. I was hoping you were going to tell me what happened in Mexico. I wanted to know!

For next time, let's work on spelling and starting sentences. I feel like you have so much to tell me as a writer so I think we should start with spelling and exciting and interesting ways to start new sentences.

I didn't really know where to start with this student. The writer clearly has a story to tell, but isn't very sure how to go about it. Unlike the Pot legal writer, he or she isn't familiar with written English. I also suggested that we go over everything together since I get the feeling that the writer doesn't have a clue about written language. I figured that correct spelling and sentence variety would be some progress.